tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-24017814.post3090998469323298042..comments2023-08-16T08:30:19.873-07:00Comments on Sadly Waiting for Recess: Behind the PianoMr. Walkerhttp://www.blogger.com/profile/16125024096735394592noreply@blogger.comBlogger8125tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-24017814.post-79783618498411608722010-06-10T08:37:09.105-07:002010-06-10T08:37:09.105-07:00Wow! Thank you to Angie, Francis, Linda, Derrick,...Wow! Thank you to Angie, Francis, Linda, Derrick, and Nicole for commenting and saying such nice things. It was a fun poem to write - and I loved the creativity I saw from others, who took their poems somewhere else. My poem seemed safe to me, but I'm glad you liked it.Mr. Walkerhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/05507517064398624652noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-24017814.post-18203377302859418642010-06-10T07:58:17.275-07:002010-06-10T07:58:17.275-07:00Agreed with Frances...you distilled the original t...Agreed with Frances...you distilled the original text down with a nice economy of words to the original story, simple and yet not jejune. I like how you pulled the words out of the erasure text and gave them some structure and form, too. I am endlessly amazed at how different all of our results were, yet each a sparkling gem of its own.<br /><br />-NicoleRaven's Wing Poetryhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/08576438868694047958noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-24017814.post-74317919546764742072010-06-10T02:25:31.659-07:002010-06-10T02:25:31.659-07:00They've already said it, but your erasure cond...They've already said it, but your erasure condenses the original text beautifully and makes it a pleasure to read.Anonymoushttps://www.blogger.com/profile/00861397533660827678noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-24017814.post-68630815391372123912010-06-09T20:26:36.144-07:002010-06-09T20:26:36.144-07:00I'm with Francis...well done. You've taken...I'm with Francis...well done. You've taken the story and created a wonderful read (as opposed to that awful thing we had to work with). Thank you. Phew. =) http://lindagoin.com/Anonymoushttps://www.blogger.com/profile/00381071407583194092noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-24017814.post-67047826175636601952010-06-09T17:18:18.305-07:002010-06-09T17:18:18.305-07:00Your version flows very well, and I like the more ...Your version flows very well, and I like the more economical narrative much better than the original text.Francis Scudellarihttps://www.blogger.com/profile/01008685302028451297noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-24017814.post-36006505775991386722010-06-09T13:40:41.195-07:002010-06-09T13:40:41.195-07:00hello, Mr. Walker!
it's nice to be out of scho...hello, Mr. Walker!<br />it's nice to be out of school -- after a week I've forgotten what day it is.<br /><br />I like your poem and how you retained the essence of the original story. dear Dorothy should have been a poet, then maybe she wouldn't be lurking in poet-playgrounds.<br /><br />thanks for playing along.<br />:)angiehttps://www.blogger.com/profile/08888525500338307437noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-24017814.post-56245037316955074302010-06-07T14:04:22.694-07:002010-06-07T14:04:22.694-07:00Mrs. Warren,
Thank you for your kind words. I wa...Mrs. Warren,<br /><br />Thank you for your kind words. I wasn't expecting any comments so soon, so finding yours was such a pleasant surprise. I'm so happy it's summer too. I had to find a poetry prompt and start writing again; I couldn't wait until Wednesday to post.Mr. Walkerhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/05507517064398624652noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-24017814.post-45583001422163464052010-06-07T11:30:03.835-07:002010-06-07T11:30:03.835-07:00Excellent work, Mr. Walker. Similar to my take......Excellent work, Mr. Walker. Similar to my take...but I won't post until Wednesday. I'm so happy it's finally summer time!!!<br />I look forward to reading more of your work.<br /><br />Mrs. Warrenbrenda whttps://www.blogger.com/profile/00846306414656375463noreply@blogger.com